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Week 7 Story: A Teenage Disaster

A Teenage Disaster

Sarah and Rachel had known, and hated, each other their entire life. As mean, popular girls- they were always comparing looks and competing for guys and attention. They each spent an absurd amount of money on clothes and plastic surgery in order to be the most beautiful girl in their high school. One day, a popular football player asked out Rachel on a date in front of the entire school. Sarah, enraged that she was not the one asked out, felt ashamed and embarrassed. She began to question how attractive she was and went looking for confirmation. After some thought, she decided to have a modeling competition with Sarah to prove who was prettier. Sarah readily agreed because she had no doubt that she would win. The news of the competition spread around the entire school, and soon even the teachers and administration were involved. The principle decided to set up a time and place where the girls would walk down runways and compete for their classmates votes in a pageant-style competition. Nearly everyone in the school thought it was absurd, but decided to go anyways because they would get free food at the event. In the evening, the competition began and classmates would cast their votes for either Sarah or Rachel. Towards the end of the night, Sarah stepped on Rachel's dress causing it to rip in front of everyone. Enraged, Rachel started to scream and punched Sarah. As their dresses were destroyed and their hair was ripped, they ended up destroying the vote counting table and creating a fire which burned away any possible chance of finding the winner of this competition. The principle heard of the fight and broke it up before anyone in the audience could get injured. However, both Rachel and Sarah were put in detention- and ever since that day have had unresolved drama. 

[Girl fight. Image information.]



Author's Note:

This story is based on the plight in 'The Bush Cow and the Elephant'. In that story, it explains why the bush cow and the elephants are always fighting and making a mess in local markets.I decided to change it into a modern day 'cat fight' between two popular girls in high school. Although the pageant is not likely to happen in real life, there seems to always be drama involving teenage girls. I hope you enjoyed!

Bibliography:

Dayrell, E. The Bush Cow and the Elephant. Folk Stories From Southern Nigeria. Link.
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  1. Rachel FisherOctober 19, 2020 at 12:56 AM

    Hi Katie,
    I love the approach that you took with this story! I did something very similar in my Indian Epics course by taking an epic and making the story about a family in a modern neighborhood with a single mom. The teenage cat fight is super relatable to any reader because we've all been through high school and/or watched some 2000s show! I loved reading about the cat-fight and rivalry. Great job!

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  2. gabby taylorOctober 19, 2020 at 11:12 AM

    Hey Katie,
    How easy is it to picture yourself in high school and something ridiculous like this is going on! I am so thankful I made it out of high school, alive haha. I think flipping the classic story into a teenager story was a fun way to get the theme across. You did a great job writing this story so it was clear that these 2 girls were enemies. Even though the pageant between the 2 is unlikely to happen in real life, it's not all that hard to picture something very similar happening in a cafeteria!

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  3. radominicOctober 23, 2020 at 10:27 AM


    Hello!
    I like your retelling of the story. That was a great idea of making it modern-day. I had Mean Girls feeling while reading. However, there is a mistake in one of the sentences, and I think it was an honest mistake. It still needs to be corrected because it's confusing for the reader.

    You said, " Sarah, enraged," and, "she decided to have a modeling competition," and then, "Sarah readily agreed."

    This needs to be fixed because you were in what seems to be Sarah's point of view. You say Sarah is enraged and looked for confirmation, which is fine, the problem lies with saying Sarah agreed. Isn't she the one who decided it? Your story would be improved, if you wrote something like, Sarah approached Rachel with the idea of a competition.

    I hope this helps, and I can't wait to see what else you write.

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